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Rough draft -- What Is Medicine? Definition Paper 01.30.11 __Introduction:__ __Body__ - ease pain - makes life easier for someone who is disabled - help a person do things they couldn't because of disease or other factors - save the life of a premature baby - cure different diseases - save the lives of accident victims __Conclusion__
 * Introduce topic: Term= medicine
 * Class= preserving health
 * Include dic. def.: is the science and art dealing with the matinance of health and the prevention, alleviation, or cure of a disease.
 * Add interview defs.: a way of healing, something that cures a person, a means to help our bodies to restore itself when it is out of sorts.
 * Thesis: Medicine is a way to heal, restore, and cure your body when it's out of sorts.
 * Characteristic 1: improves quality of life
 * Characteristic 2: preserves life
 * restate thesis (use different def.)
 * bring it all together!

A person takes medicine at least once in their life. So, what is this invention? What is medicine? According to that most wonderful invention called a dictionary, "medicine is the science and art dealing with the matinance of health and the prevention, alleviation, or cure of a disease." Medicine can preserve a person's life and it can improve a person's life. It is a way of preserving the health of humanity as a whole.

Medicine can do a lot, one thing it does is improve the quality of life for people. Depending on the type of illness a person has there are different types of treatments or sugeries that will help improve life for the patient. One thing medicine can do is ease the physical pain a person feels. Like, if you break your arm, your orthepedic doctor will give you pain pills to numb the pain. It can also make life easier for someone who is disabled. Medicine or in some cases sugery can enable a person to do things they could never do before due to disease, disability, or other factors.

The other thing medicine is capable of is preserving life. Medicine can save the life of a baby born premature. It can cure different diseases. There are some diseases that have different treament options, like polio. While the only real cure is time, polio can be prevented by a vaccine. Which brings up another important thing. Not only do cures prevent diseases, but vaccines do as well. Children who are vaccinated probaly will not ever contract whatever disease they were vaccinated for. Which in the long run preserves one more life.

Medicine can also be described as any substance or substances used in treating disease or illness; medicament; remedy.

//HI this is najma yours has a nice start and a question that sets the whole theme of medicine just need to expand in the topic a little maybe talk about what other people think of medicine as what in their life? over all i think you did a great job on the above paragraphs :)//


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 * A person takses (j.f. takes) medicine at least once in their lifetime. So, what is this invention? What is medicine? According to Merriam-Webster, "medicine is the sciecne and art dealing with the matinance of health and the prevention, alleviation, or cure of a disease." Medicine can improve a person's life and it can preserve a person's life. It is a way of preserving the health of humanity as a whole.**
 * One thing medicine soes is improve the quality of life for people. Depending on the type of illness a person has, there are different types of treatments or sugeries that will help improve life for the paitent. Another thing medicine is capable of is easing physical pain. For example, if a person get's their wisdom teeth out, the oral surgeon will perscribe pain pills to allevate (j.f. alleviate) the pain. It can also make life easier for someone who is disabled. Medicine or in some cases sugery can enable a person to to do things they could never do before due to disease, disability, or other factors.**
 * The other thing medicine is able of is preserving life. Medicine can save the life of a baby born premature. It can also cure different diseases. There some diseases that have different treament options, like polio. While the only real cure is time, polio can be prevented by a vaccine. This brings up another imporant thing, not only do cures prevent diseases, but vaccines do as well. Children who are vaccinated __probably will not ever__ (j.f. are less likely to) contract whatever disease they are vaccinated for. (j.f. there should be a ; instead of a . to conect teh to ideas) Which in the long run preserves one more life.**
 * Medicine can also be described as any substance or substances used in treateing disease or illness; medicament; remedy.**
 * Author's Note: Ms. Lange, I am not quite sure how to wrap up my paper. If you have any suggestions let me know! Thanks.**
 * (j.f. hey that was a good paper and you did provide a difinition for medice but you need to create your own definition not just use someone elses. Other than that you gave some good examples but you could expand some more on them.)**

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Think about this, a man walks into a brightly lit room there are pictures hanging on the wall, a gray speckled counter on the east wall, and different machinery pieces hanging on the west wall. The man sits down on the thinly paper covered exam table. He waits for about 15 min. and in walks in a tall woman in a pristine white lab coat, black lettering on the upper left side gives her name and title. After completing a preliminary exam, the woman does a series of tests on the man. The man�s name is Johnny and he has just been diagnosed with cancer. The next step for him is chemo and radiation. Those are forms of //medicine.// What an interesting word, medicine. It has been used for thousands of years, dating all the way back to the 13th century at its first use. Judy Amsler, 72 of Cedar Rapids responded to the question, what is medicine, with this answer: "Medicine is a means to help our bodies to restore itself when it's out of sorts." This is immensely true, medicine can improve a person's life and it can preserve a person's life. It is also a way of preserving the health of humanity as a whole. Medicine saves hundreds of lives a day. So, medicine is capable of preserving a life. It can save the life of a baby born with its heart outside its chest. True story, a baby boy was born in India with its heart outside its chest. Doctors wrapped the heart in this stuff called Gore-Text, which is a waterproof fabric used in outdoor clothing, then the doctors eased the baby's heart into its chest. Another thing medicine can do is cure different diseases. Zach Amsler, 13 from Hiawatha, states that �medicine is something that cures you.� When someone uses the word cure, a person could automatically think that the disease is gone forever, more times than not this is defiantly not the cast. There are some diseases that have different treatment options like cancer, diabetes, and polio. Let�s take polio for an example. While the only true cure is time, polio is treated with the Sister Kenny method. Polio can be prevented by a vaccine, which after a clinical trial was approved by the government in 1955. This brings up another point, not only does medicine preserve life, but it also prevents diseases. The medicine in question is a vaccine. Polio, mentioned above, has a vaccine. It is administered to children when they are babies as a preventive measure. Children who are vaccinated are less likely to contract polio, for example. This in the long run preserves just one more life. Out of the million other things medicine can do for a person, it can improve a life. How much it improves a life depends on the type of illness or disability a person possesses. Depending on the type of illness a person has, there are different types of treatments or surgeries that will help improve the life for the patient. Remember Johnny? Well, he has cancer and has to be administered a whole slew of chemo treatments. Rather than keep him in the hospital, his oncologist switched him to outpatient. This means he gets to go home. Johnny still has to take a ton pills to help fight the cancer, but every time he goes to the hospital for an IV treatment the doctor doesn�t have to stick him with a needle, they just have to insert the needle into the doohickey that this awesome writer can�t remember the name of. Another thing medicine is capable of is easing physical pain. For example, if a person gets their wisdom teeth out, the oral surgeon will prescribe pain pills to alleviate the pain. Medicine can also make life easier for someone who is disabled. It can also enable a person to do things they could never do before due to disease or disability. Take a deaf person for example; they can receive a Cochlear implant that helps them to hear. Medicine is one of the greatest and most complex inventions of all time. As Olivia Cain, 10 of Des Moines, answered the question what is medicine, she states, �Medicine is something that you can be healed by. Whether Johnny sees medicine as a substance used in treating a disease or illness, a medicament, or a remedy, he is immensely grateful that by medicine he was given a new lease on life.

Fantastic intro!! You are an excellent writer...and i love your use of imagery =) It is clear that you used a broad variety of sources and a lot of information in your work, and your voice in this paper is very nice! A few suggestions: watch the transitions and beginnings of new paragraphs; you have so much info here that it kind of meshes together if you don't put something extra in there to organize it and relate it! Also, don't overuse the word "immensely" ;) ...though it is a fun word i have to admit. Finally, i think you picked an excellent topic, but it would be cool if you stretched it a little-- talk more about what medicine encompasses due to its definition-- maybe address holistic medicine, or whether love and companionship could be considered medicine. Something outside of conventional thinking to spark cognition in the reader would be awesome!! --Lexi