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Rough draft -- Definition Paper 01.30.11 Topic:love Classification:emotion/feeling characteristics:respect, understanding, loyalty, compassion.

What is love ? Love is an emotion or a feeling of the heart and mind. It is desire and strong. From the moment you are born you have the ability to love and to be loved. Loving another human being requires holds a few key components; such as respect, understanding, loyalty, and compassion. Respect a well heard word, a key point in love by the simple fact that that is what people want. Love requires understanding close to or more then anything else. How is it possible to love something that doesn't maKe sense ? Loyalty is very often doubted in relationships these days but is ket to a healthy one. Compassion and glue go hand in hand in love. With out one the other does not exist.

Revision An overused, four letter word, that everyone acquires their own definition to, love. Though, it seems more of a complicated aspect of life than a sentence in a book. From the moment a child opens his or her eyes they obtain the ability to love and to receive love. The meaning and feeling of love though, changes through life. To a child love occurs between that child and their relatives. This hopefully, in most situations, remains the same through life. Time passes, beginning the exploration of 'puppy love' during the school years. Middle school and some high school students remain the well-known users of this so called puppy love. In puppy love the emotional connection is lacking, claiming to love another based on their social status and or appearance. As teenagers turn into adults or gain maturity, the view of love changes once again. When first asking an adult figure what she thought, she closed off, "I don't know!" After pushing, what she came up with proceeded as so, "Caring about someone else more than yourself," leaving it as simple as that. Caring, tying in with respect and even stretching as far as understanding, because how do you care about something that remains a puzzle? A constant change, or growth rather, of definitions; love exists as a bond between people, what people see and believe, caring, respecting, and understanding another being.

Lol now you should define lerrve!! ;) I think you picked a reeeally hard topic, and i like how you approached it. There is a lot of variety in your writing, which is awesome, but if i were you i would try to incorporate a little bit more objective information (if that is at all possible...) into your piece! Maybe some different philosophical viewpoints or something...just try to get something in there that doesn't sound so much like exclusively your opinion. <3 --Lex

﻿ I like how your revision is short and to the point. My only critique is that you should think about adding a stronger ending to the paper. Also you should consider adding another persons point of veiw. But other then that, the essay is very good.:) - Hunter H.