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Rough draft -- Definition Paper 01.30.11 = = =__INTELLIGENCE__=

 Everyone has some sort of intelligence in them [try to add a more attention grabbing statement, the ides is good but it could be phrased more dramatically] , it may be different from the main stream meaning of being "book-smart", having an insanely high IQ [you don't need clarification for book smart. I would probably use the IQ example with a stronger adjective] , or taking all advanced classes. But Intelligence is much more than that. It is having the capacity to learn, to reason, to adapt, and to understand the world around us. And not having the ability for comprehension, adaptation, and cognition we are basically brainless vegetables.

Comprehension plays a huge role in the concept of intelligence, because you can read or look at anything, and not understand it, that mean any media from books to piece of art. That understanding that you get leads to questioning "why it is like that" [awkward phrasing in the hypothetical question, the sentence doesn't even need the hypothetical. "The understanding acquired from comprehension leads to higher questioning about true meaning."] which leads to thinking deeply about the big picture of things. If you didn't understand the medium you can't learn anything from it and expand your intelligence, and that is the great thing about intelligence once you understand and learn something new, you can build on it more. Understanding and comprehension is one thing, but being able to manipulate and change your environment is another.

It is amazing what intelligence can do with [for] us, if we are in an uncomfortable position or situation we can change mentally so it's all okay and normal. Also after learning something useful we can use that to shape our environment for the better or worse depending how you use your intelligence and conscience thinking. Just like animals adapt to climate changes, we as humans adapt in the same [manner?] to our ever changing environment everyday, and this is all done cognitively.

Without the use of our brain and thought processes or cognition, intelligence would cease to exist. Because with our brain and thoughts, what we learned would be nothing and not understood which means we couldn't adapt to our environment and would eventually die [idk what this sentence is trying to say, look at verbs and nouns]. Cognition is vital to our survival and intelligence because if we don't think we basically are brainless zombies. [zombies are cool, but not in formal writing :)]

Intelligence is very important to us as humans because it's what separate us from zombies and no one want to be a zombie. But in all seriousness intelligence is an intangible concept that shapes us as people, although the media sees intelligence as only being smart, while that is one part of it there is much more to it. Revolving around understanding, thinking, and learning intelligence is vital for our lives.

As a generality, look at your sentences and see what changes can be made to form a stronger tone and style. A lot of verbs and adjectives could be replaced with other words that have a stronger connotation.

Revision:

Intelligence has no barriers, it may be different from the main stream ", having a preposterously high IQ, or taking all advanced classes. However, Intelligence is much more than that. It is having the capacity to learn, to reason, to adapt, and to understand the world around us. In addition, not having the ability for comprehension, adaptation, and cognition we are brainless vegetables. 

Comprehension plays a huge role in the concept of intelligence, because you can read or look at anything, and not understand it that means any media from books to piece of art. The understanding obtained leads to questioning about true meaning. This leads to thinking deeply about the big picture of things. If you didn't understand the medium you can't learn anything from it and expand your intelligence, and that is the great thing about intelligence once you understand and learn something new, you can build on it more. Understanding and comprehension is one thing, but being able to manipulate and change your environment is another. 

It is amazing what intelligence can do for us  , if we are in an uncomfortable position or situation we can change mentally so it is all okay and normal. Also after learning something useful, we can use that to shape our environment for the better or worse depending how you use your intelligence and conscience thinking. Just like animals adapt to climate changes, we as humans adapt in the same manner to our ever-changing environment every day, and this is all done cognitively. 

Without thought processes or cognition, intelligence would cease to exist. Because without thoughts, everything we learned would be meaningless. Thinking about the “true meaning” is vital to our survival and intelligence because if we do not think we are an empty shell.   Intelligence is very important to us as humans; it is what separate us from being a “zombie” and no one want to be a zombie. However, in all seriousness intelligence is an intangible concept that shapes us as people, although the media sees intelligence as only being smart, while that is one part of it there is much more to it. Revolving around understanding, thinking, and learning intelligence is vital for our lives.